Shuko's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Phoenix Wright zero pt.1]

Sigh...

I hope that was your own original story. If you're just repeating what happened in the Phoenix Wright game, I'm going to be severely angry. *Hasn't played her copy yet*

Anyway, the story was captivating and kept me interested. But the grammar sucked eggs. Really, next time you need to get someone to do a grammar and spelling check for you. You made so many mistakes it was incredibly rare to see a single block of text without any. Those kinds of details will stand out, especially in a text-based movie like this.

And next time, be sure to make some of your own animations, and don't just rely on the existing sprites. The limited number of poses in the PW game will make this thing boring if you don't spice them up a little. Add some voice acting, stop abruptly cutting off and starting the music, and clean up your grammar. Then make sure you use your own story, and you're good to go. ;)

Good luck. I hope you continue to improve!

MogMage responds:

First I want to say that the story isn't a copy from the game. The story is all made up by me but I have used the characters from the original story.

Then I know that my english sucks and I wished I was better with the spelling.

And voice acting! No way! My voice is worse than my spelling. Belive me.

[Vampire Kabob]

Hahah! Nice one!

Something about an Eskimo fighting to the tune of Karate Kid made me laugh. xD Anyway, interesting buildup you've got here. I like the fbf stuff, although your anatomy and consistency of character visuals need serious work. Things are way too amorphous for my taste... then again you may also be doing that on purpose. o_~ hrm... Anyway, this seems kind of experimental in nature. How long have you been flashing?

[Tosti Trieout]

it was a good start

I like the premise of the story, and the comical way the protagonist refers to toast as his "tosti" and does the little "woowoowoo" thing, lol. And although I'm the last one who has any business saying Naruto music is overdone (*cough*seeNinjaMario*cough*) I still think it might have been better if you'd chosen another kind of music. :P Maybe something with a more metal feel to it.

The sketches were good, but they were just that, sketches. You ought to put more effort into it and incorporate complete characters and colors into your movie. It's just not a complete movie yet. ;) Still, it made me laugh, so you get brownie points for that. :P

Migel responds:

hehe oh well getting a 5 from the maker of ninja mario is not that bad. Anyways I still wanted to get to know flash and I never drew anything before so basicly this was really scary for me :P. Im more of a animation fan than a animator :P

[Cackletta's Revenge (SE)]

Hrm... it shows potential...

but it's still very unpolished. :( You have explosions that don't fit, sprites and backgrounds that jump and wiggle unnecessarily, and the voiceovers needed some editing. But I think you can turn this into something good if you work at it.

Also, there isn't much of a story yet. You barely had any content at all in here. What I don't understand is why, for so little movie, it's over 5 megabytes? o_0 Maybe that flash editor you use doesn't compress things correctly. Oh, and that's another thing. It places a watermarked text line at the top that overwrites some of the dialogue boxes in your movie. You might want to think about switching to Macromedia Flash instead. :(

All in all, it's got potential, but I really don't think it's ready yet.

[Fail Cat]

No! Poor kitty! ;_;

You sick bastard. Kyle, I'm calling the ASPCA on you. :P Lol. Anyway, it was pretty nice. I liked the graphics over all, but it's too bad you didn't have those guys in suits with more positions. :P Like, you should have chosen the second guy that had a position with him holding a gun. =x Anyway, hope this doesn't get blammed. xD

MisterSambert responds:

Haha hey shuko! Thanks for the comments and suggestions. If I make more movies like this, I'll add positions and stuff ;)

[Duck Man ep 1]

Nice drawing, but that's all it was...

Meh. You had one nice drawing of a man with a mallard head, and then tweened him around the stage, with a few various imported jpeg backgrounds. Could have been worse, but it wasn't much of a movie... that and the fact that it made no sense. ~_^

Oh, and what other people are saying about Duckman is right... but you didn't call yours Duckman. You called it Duck Man. Anyway, it needs work... like actual animation and maybe a plot or something. But hey, you've got the nice drawing of duck-head in there. :P

DeadMouseClock responds:

I wasn't supposed to have a plot or meaning, thanks for the non abusive reviw though.

[Day of the Devil]

Lol!

Much funnier than I was expecting. xD Pretty darn cool. You've got a lot of competition today, but I hope you win a placing. ;)

[The Stupid FAT Kid 2]

Not too bad, but could definitely use work. ;)

I like the originality and the exaggerated characters a lot. But you need to work on making your animation more fluid, and that involves using more than a couple frames here and there. :P Voice acting might have helped this out a lot too. If you need to use speech bubbles, you can usually make it better just by having voice acting. ;) Usually, but not always. :P

Still, the outcome was funny, and the old lady was totally sinister. Good job on this, and I hope to see more from you as you improve. ;)